Jasmine Hart

I quite liked this, Kit. I liked the little portraits you made of your dad. As usual, I hope you'll excuse my playing with this; (I've played with line endings-what ...

I'd advise getting rid of the bold font as you don't really need it and it's a bit hard on the eyes. This is a really lovely poem. It flows ...

My first suggestion would be to change the title. Love is a common theme in writing, and especially in poetry, so you need to bring something new to it. Maybe ...

This is very good. It's moving without being cringey. It flows well for the most part and I like how you portray the different individuals. I really love the last ...

I love your imagery, but I think this jumps around just a little too much. I'd like to see a bit more development. I hope you don't mind me playing ...

I see what you've tried to do and you've managed your aim really well, but I think it could be expressed a little better. I love your description here. It's ...

Oh Via. You poor thing. I read this about a week ago, but it upset me too much for me to comment. Now, I'm not going to re-read it as ...

Hmmm...I'm not so sure about this one Matt. Usually I love your stuff but I think this lacked your usual power. I find that a lot of what attracts me ...

The title is great.Your language is brilliant as usual Clau. You have some beautiful phrases here. I especially liked; "field of feline flowers where the blades pierce and the whiskers ...

This is really great. I love how you express yourself, and it flows beautifully. I especially enjoyed; "I tango in-between your fingertips." and "You play me like a saxophone, your ...

I really love it. The idea is interesting and well expressed.I especiallu enjoyed; "Who’d have thought soapy spoons, forks, and knives would remind me so much of love?" and "but ...

This is really great Kit. It's fresh and interesting, I love your use of pauses and the likes, and think the two voices work well alone and together. I'm being ...

Your imagery is lovely and I love your use of sibilance. You convey the scene really vividly. I'd puntuate a bit more, and also break some of teh lines up ...

This is really great, Ed. I love your imagery and all the clever details you add, and how you somehow make them fit beautifully. I love the first line, and ...

Your imagery is good here. I really love; "misty maze", and "meadows of elation." I think you could cut "it" from the first line, so it's more to the point. ...